Christina Barrett - 02/28/2020
ENG 152 N - Intermediate College Composition - Christian Sidney Dickinson
Toulmin Essay - Outline
Introductory Paragraph
Sources
1. Article 1 - “Globalizing Music Education: A Framework by Alexandra Kertz-Welzel (review)” by Amy Jackson
2. Article 2 - “A Return to Amateurism in Music Education” by Joh Kratus
Credibility
1. Article 1 – It is a review of a book by a German girl who is an expert in music education. She seems very poised and doesn’t veer off the main idea into petty frustrations.
2. Article 2 – He is an experienced music educator talking about the realities of the world of professional music and filing in students’ heads about being the best to no avail in the professional world.
Toulmin Model
1. Claim – Music education is a heated issue. Some people think there is too much music in schools, and in some schools they do not have a complete music education.
2. Support – People are antsy about the comparison globally between different countries or areas in regards to music education. Music education is a proud cause, but students are finding it is too hard to get a job after high school or college.
3. Warrant – If we don’t make music good around the world, it could cause a lot of hatred and disagreement, as music is an important part of entertainment in life. If we don’t find a way to satisfy the need for people to feel they have music in their lives after high school and college is over, people will become agitated and restless and waste time feeling bad.
Claim
Music education may not seem important to some students, but it is important to others. There are credible sources affirming the supposition that the state of music education is an important figure, and it is a global competition.
1st Section – Article 1
1. The English Language and Power
1. The author of the book being reviewed is German.
2. One big thing about music education being considered pertinent is that Germans know in the end they want to be the best at music and therefore need power.
3. Americans sometimes fall asleep and think they have it easy but wake up challenged in music education. Anglo-American power is German music education's barrier to world dominion in things such as classical music.
2. Tactics
1. Music education is a desired proficiency but takes work.
2. Music education needs to meet the needs of the local people, not just be globally equal, if they want their issues to be addressed.
3. Music Educators need to learn politics to apply their specific, personal needs; so, music is important in politics and people don’t even know it. That’s a real wake-up call on how important Music Education is.
2nd Section – Article 2
1. People are so ignorant about music, they don’t even realize it needs to be played for fun and not for money, and it’s important in music education.
1. “Hell is full of musical amateurs.” - George Bernard Shaw
2. Amateur music from classical to pop is all about having fun because there aren’t enough opportunities for everyone who wants to be a professional classical musician in an orchestra and often not even in small groups.
3. P.E. is more important, and it’s also an “up in the air” issue like music education.
2. Teachers are creating egotistical, dysfunctional snobs in music education.
1. All these people are signing up for high school orchestra and band and majoring in music, but there’s not enough jobs out there for them all to be professionals, like in an orchestra if they wanted. That means even people who think music education is important have problems with it being functional for success.
2. People used to promote their students to be amateur musicians, apparently long ago according to the author. Today, in music education, this is not always the case.
3. People will end up in community orchestras like me that are filled to the brim or hanging up their instrument. They should have known before they started in their music classes.
Conclusion
1. Music education is an important issue.
2. People think music education is okay, but you’ll find it’s become a global issue and musicians can’t easily find employment.
3. People need to realize how important it is that people learn to use music for enjoyment rather than money, or they can try to make more jobs.